Fallen 0 Posted November 8, 2006 Share Posted November 8, 2006 (edited) General Full name: Marcus Falden Nickname: Fallen Age: 20 Gender: Male Race: (Natural or Coordinator)coordinator Occupation: Recruit Birthplace: The upper class housing devision. Citizenship: Orb Personality: Loud, hot headed. Appearance Photo: Height: 5'10 Weight: 152 Hair Colour and Style: Long Black Eye Colour: Brown Identifying Marks: Skin Tone: White/Caucasian Build: Lightly Toned Clothing: White Shirt and tight jeans. Handiness: (Left-handed, Right-handed or Ambidextrous)Righthanded Background Mother: Sarah Videis Father: Mark Falden Siblings: younger brother, Mathew Wife/Girlfriend: Ashey Tomulsin Personal History: At a young age his mother was killed and his father died in the war. He and his younger brother moved to the slums to survive. He raised his brother as his own son. About the age of sixteen, he and his Friend, Adam Navis got a job offer as mercenaries. The pay was an offer too good to give up. The amount would have gotten them an apartment in the city. The job was tooken up and given to set explosives on a convoy via route t the city. The job was a failure and he was captured along with many other young boys and were sent to a disciplinary institution. Where after he was a "sufficient" member of society. He was then drafted into the war where he is thrown into the fray of bloodshed. Edited November 10, 2006 by Guest Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ishian 0 Posted November 8, 2006 Share Posted November 8, 2006 I suppose your going to elaborate on the bio? Its a bit on the shortside, Citizenship must be decided and there haven't been a war in several years. Try to look trough other profiles and be sure to check out the storyline. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ziggy 0 Posted November 8, 2006 Share Posted November 8, 2006 ArcAngel is a ship not a nation, Nations are Like ORB, EA and The Plants. fix it. also more details in the bio, AND legthen it. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kaizer 0 Posted November 8, 2006 Share Posted November 8, 2006 Ziggy & Christoph are right, the Archangel is a ship, and thus one cannot be a citizen of it (especially since Orb long since decommissioned it, I'm sure); nor has there been a war for quite a few years (read up on the storyline page of the site for details). If you don't want to say where Marcus was born, perhaps you could say where he lived; there are plenty of slums in the world, so take your pick . Also, try to expand your character's personality some, as loud and hot-headed can probably describe a ton of people on this site, myself included . Spellcheck your work some personally, as the site's spell checker isn't a flawless program, and don't forget to add some clothing as well; can't have Marcus walking around in the nude, can we? On a lighter note, welcome to the site, I can't wait to see what Marcus turns out like P.S. did you draw his art yourself? If so, I am glad to see yet another artist join this site (far too many of them, and you all make me jealous :(" title="Angry" /> ). If not, you have to give credit to the original artist, we don't want any copyright problems and such afterall Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
liubei013 0 Posted November 8, 2006 Share Posted November 8, 2006 Hmm...Personality issues were mentioned, personal origins same, and history...also mentioned. Oh, right, you also need to mention the clothing. The picture helps but it doesn't substitute your written description. The general trend is to have two 'sets' of clothing; one for civilian use and the other for the military. But it's a good start, nonetheless. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Marcus Falden 0 Posted November 22, 2006 Share Posted November 22, 2006 Hi my name is Marcus Falden, and I am the creator of that drawing and the oribinator of this name. I just joinned to say this sense I was not aware my image, which by the way is a semi self portrait of me, was being used in a gundam rp page. Well as for th character profile I would like to actually join this Rp as you can see my art is quite good. I have a lot more drawings if you all want ot see them. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
winders 0 Posted November 23, 2006 Share Posted November 23, 2006 Hi there, unless you have evidence that it is your drawing; eg: original source, lineart, etc, your claim will be considered invalid until such time as you can prove it. If you wish to pursue the matter please PM Valiant the details, this is a character profile not a discussion thread. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Valiant 96 Posted November 23, 2006 Share Posted November 23, 2006 This isn't a birthplace. By birthplace we refer to the place of birth of the character. "The upper class housing devision." When we have choices for you to choose, please only state the choice and not include the other options. "(Natural or Coordinator)coordinator" You would need to lengthen the history as well as background more. ---------- As for the picture, we would always welcome an artist. Please show us proof that the art is indeed yours. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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