talon 0 Posted October 13, 2006 Share Posted October 13, 2006 General Full name: Talon Patrick Morasaki Nickname: Talon Age: 19 Gender: male Race: Coordinator Occupation: ms pilot Birthplace: Junius city Citizenship: Plant Personality: Calm and collected, always analizing problems, has a desire to do good but is quick to act on those desires which can lead to difficult problems, he is personable ,but is ferocious in fight for what he believes. Appearance Height: 6' Weight: 174lbs Hair Colour and Style:Blonde, long hair Eye Colour: hazel green Identifying Marks: scar on right shoulder Skin Tone: tanned white Build: athletic Clothing: military uniform, or white shirt ,black overshirt, and dark jeans. Handiness: Right-handed Background Mother: Elaina Moratan Father: Jim Morasaki(deceased) Siblings: none Personal History: Talon has grown up in the age of war, he has been brought up to a military family,he saw the destruction rained down apon plant in the second bloody valentine war,he has watched as battles were fought in the very space around his home, and he has watched as his father died defending his home.Talon knows pain, but he has learn to over come this and he sees the good in all people his only wish is for peace, but in the case that one must fight for peace he will fight for it gladly. His family has been torn apart by war and he has seen the worst it can do. Talon has been studying for years so he can become a pilot, he has only the pilot accademy left before he gets his suit.all he wants is to defend his home and his family and friends.If it comes to it he will give his life for this cause and that is what makes him a strong pilot, the will to defend what he believes.He love to solve problems and is one hundred percent devoted to protecting others.his quick actions to help others has gotten himself into trouble on many occasions and he has only now begun to think trough actions before doing it. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
winders 0 Posted October 25, 2006 Share Posted October 25, 2006 Grammar could use alot of work, there is like a total void spaces after commas. There is no real bio per-say, like how did he get into the academy? How did he study for years to become a pilot without being in the academy, how was his education? Etc. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
kct 0 Posted October 25, 2006 Share Posted October 25, 2006 Profile too typical of a 'perfect protagonist type of pilot'. Maybe he should have some rather interesting going on other than piloting. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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