Kenji Arian Usima

[Kenji Usima 0]

General

 

Full name: Kenji Arian Usima (born Kenjitsen Unarai Reijin)

Nickname: Kenji-Kun

Age: 22

Gender: Male

Race: Coordinator

Occupation: Manager of his adoptive father's small town shop, Ex-Soldier

Birthplace: Junius Seven

Citizenship: PLANTs

Personality: Kenji is usually a kind and generous person with no desire to cause pain to others, he is often seen walking with his childhood sweetheart Artemis Burik. He cares deeply about conflict and fights and believes that war is wrong and will only lead to wrong. With many hidden emotions, Kenji often breaks out into tears in the middle of the night and is comforted by Artemis. When not with his beloved he spends time writing novels or working in his small shop in ORB's capital city.

 

Appearance

 

Height: 5' 9"

Weight: 132.6lbs

Hair Colour and Style: Short, black hair that is usually kept clean. To Kenji, neat is perfection

Eye Colour: Black

Identifying Marks: An eyepatch worn over where his left eye once was

Skin Tone: Light

Build: Fit and Athletic

Clothing: Kenji wears an old uniform that was given to him by Daisuke Usima after his return to ORB. The uniform, made of 4 inital clothing pieces, is a symbolic icon of the Usima family that is passed down geeration to generation. The jacket of the uniform is a dark, navy blue. Decorated with medals earned by his father, grandfather, and fathers past, the jacket is possibly the main article of the uniform itself. The pants are made of a heat-resilient material to help keep body temperature at a norm. The gloves are decorated with a special design worn by the Usima family for luck, and it hasnt let the family down yet.

Handiness: Right Handed

 

Background

 

Mother: Felecia Reijin (deceased, died during the first Bloody Valentine; Coordinator), Meryl Usima (deceased, killed by a Coordinator; adoptive mother; Natural)

Father: Karius Reijin (deceased, died during the first Bloody Valentine; Coordinator), Daisuke Usima (adoptive father; Natural)

Siblings: Haseo Reijin (unknown older brother; Coordinator)

Wife/Girlfriend: Artemis Burik (childhood sweetheart and current girlfriend; Natural)

 

Personal History:

 

Kenji was born on January 2nd, Cosmic Era 68 on the PLANT Colony of Junius Seven. While living on the PLANTs and growing up with the people around him, Kenji slowly developed a shy and quiet side, this resulted in worry in his mother and father. Since their second and youngest son would not speak, they began to worry and felt that if something wasnt done quick that poor, young Kenji would die. While in the emergency room, Karius and Felecia learned that Kenji wasnt sick, but that he was having allergic reactions to dust, causing his throat to swell and stop him from being able to speak. As it turned out, the allergic reactions also caused Kenji's broncial tubes, causing him to develop a case of athsma. Kenji, being the young and shy baby he was, had no idea that the problems he had would effect him forever.

 

On March 15, CE 69 Kenji had just turned 1 and had slowly began to have fewer and fewer allergic reactions, this raised hope in the rest of the family. His mother, Felecia, held him in her arms for the first time in almost 3 months because of fear that he would only become more sick. During the rejoice of his family, Kenji began to throw a fit, almost injuring Felecia by pulling down a knife rack on her in the midst of curiousity. This event caused Felecia to become scared and feel hated by Kenji, which in fact was not the case, he had just been overly curious. After this event, Karius decided to send Felecia off on a vacation so she could have a break from Kenji and the stress he seemed to induce on her. From then on Karius decided to take care of Kenji from then on, or to me more specific, the day he died.

 

On Kenji's second birthday he was once again reunited with Felecia, the moment of happiness seemed like it would last forever, but the small family would soon learn that happiness never was forever. While with his grandparents in a shuttle on the way to October City, Kenji saw brilliant lights, the lights of several nuclear explosions. At first, being the young and ambitious boy he was, Kenji thought they were fireworks for Valentines Day. He laughed and clapped his hands at the sight of the lights and gazed at them in awe, but soon realized that it wasnt as he thought. Looking at his grandparents, Kenji noticed a look of worry on their faces and looked back to his home, for the last time. Later on, his grandparents explained to Kenji that his parents died in an attack carried out by the Earth Allaince. The news confused Kenji at first, but soon came to realize it the best way a child could that he'd never see his mother and father again.

 

Kenji was then sent to ORB not to soon after to live with the Usima family and try to start his life over again with a new family. His days with the Usima family were long and happy, causing Kenji to develop a kind and soft personality. At the time of his 14 birthday, Kenji had almost completely forgotten about Karius and Felecia, coming to the conclusion that the Usima's were his real family. On March 13, CE 82 Kenji was helping his new father Daisuke at his shop when he met Artemis Burik, a girl that had been living next door to him. Completely captivated by her beauty, Kenji instantly fell in love with her and made an immediate attempt to become her friend. The two of them spent time together and grew closer and closer every day, Kenji began to feel as if she was his one true love.

 

Artemis and Kenji celebrated their first anniversary as a couple on March 14, CE 84. On the way to visit his beloved Artemis, Kenji noticed something wrong with the Usima family shop and went to investigate. There, he found the dead body of Meryl Usima, his adoptive mother. Scared and full of sadness, Kenji ran to Artemis' house and called Daisuke, telling him the news of Meryl's death. Daisuke told Kenji to remain there with Artemis until things were sorted out and left to visit some officers, leaving Kenji with Artemis to greive on the sad moment. Upon the heartbreak, Kenji and Artemis found closure and went to bed. After Kenji woke the next day he recieved notice that he was to leave ORB and return to the PLANTs, he quietly woke Artemis and told her of the news, kssing her and promising his return. Before departing, Kenji gave Artemis a necklace, asking her not to forget him or their love. She cried, agreeing to hold out for him, and Kenji left

 

Kenji turned 17 some time after the incident and returned home to see Artemis, finding she had kept her promise and held out for him. Full of happiness and release of surpressed feelings, Kenji and Artemis fell asleep in each others arms. As his feelings on fighting and death slowly raised, Kenji vowed to stay with Artemis and protect her, building a small house on out on the ORB countryside. Kenji and Artemise remained together, watching a number of beautiful sunsets and gazed at the stars together for countless nights. Since  the return, Kenji began to work at Daisuke's shop in Main City, ORB to help support Artemis and himself. He later lost his eye in an armed robbery attempt in Daisuke's shop, during which he tried to to grab the knife from the man and instead had it stabbed into his eye socket. Nearly dying, Kenji made a promise to Artemis to be more careful and to watch his actions in dire situations.Now 22, Kenji has become the manager of Daisuke's shop where he hopes to raise enough money to leave ORB and return to the PLANTs.

 

_{CREDIT: Roy Mustang pic from FullMetal Alchemist}

[fireminerva 0]

It doesn't look too bad, props for the Roy Mustang picture.

 

You do need to modify your post a bit, you're missing the header that has become standard to the site in order to denote who the user of the character is, in case you ever have multiple characters.  Please go here and review the template to see what you missed.

 

Aside from that I'd be willing to give this a thumbs up.

[liubei013 0]

Uh...not quite, fire.

 

1. First off, you should place the Credit(s) for the picture right underneath the image, rather than the profile.

2. fireminerva already mentioned the missing header section.  (See template)

 

3. History

 

Paragraph 1: It should be 'affect' instead of 'effect'... a fairly common error.

Paragraph 2: This particular sentence was a little unclear:

From then on Karius decided to take care of Kenji from then on, or to me more specific, the day he died.

I think you're missing the word 'until' meaning until the day he (or 'his father') died.

 

You listed Artemis as a childhood sweetheart, but it seems to be a more standard relationship within a span of a few years, rather than originating from youth. 

 

You also have a time inconsistency.  According to your History, Kenji turned 17 after the incident involving his adoptive parents...and that incident took place around the year C.E. 84.  Somehow he grew up five years in a year's time.  Please take note of that.

 

Also, the stated occupation other than 'manager of a shop' (you didn't specify what sort of shop it was) there was also 'Ex-Soldier.'  However, I did not see any indication of any military service in his History. 

 

Other than that, you got a good and promising 'civvie' profile here.

Edited July 22, 2007 by Guest

[fireminerva 0]

Sorry Kenji, I'm still getting the hang of this.

[liubei013 0]

@fireminerva: Sorry, it wasn't my intention to critique you.  We were all at that point before.

Just read things through first then go through it with in more detail afterwards.

[Kenji Usima 0]

I usually do go super in-depth with detail and stuff...but there were a few things I forgot to work out before posting it (being this is a bio I use in a lot of places).

 

If you want the actually bio I'd be more than happy to post it up after editing...but the thing is around 30 paragraphs long <.<

[liubei013 0]

That last comment was just for fireminerva, sorry if I wasn't clear. ^^;

 

Content-wise, it's okay.  But it'd really help if you took care of the points I mentioned before.  Then it should be more than sufficient for approval.  (Unless someone else points out something I missed...which happens occasionally)  You don't need to add like ZOMG ten or twenty additional paragraphs, since Quality > Quantity.

 

A profile is meant to give other members a good glimpse of your character; it also serves as an impromptu role-play sample in a way.

[kct 0]

If there is something I noticed, you mentioned that the uniform he wears is something that is apparently special in terms of status. Care to explain the type of status the Usima family had? Is it some form of trademark, or that it has something more than just a mere decoration (given that you mentioned medals and such)?